cyanide wrote:I was asked to help with the letter, and while I found Jackal's letter to be strong and hitting the mark, I made a few grammatical changes and revisions:The PC gamers have never had a choice; they have always been forced to purchase a product of EA Sports if they wished to play a basketball simulation on their computers.
is the "on their computers" part necessary? we've identified them as PC gamers already in that sentence, which really makes that part redundant.