beau_boy04 wrote:Stay tuned!
beau_boy04 wrote:Any advice? suggestions?
The X wrote:ahh well, karma has a way of working these things out
cyanide wrote:Based on his last post, though, I'm starting to think he's just full of shit.
Andrew wrote:It does change the tone of the thread somewhat but even if that's the case I still have to gripe. In a good story, the hero can't get the girl(s) this early; it kills all suspense, you can't get behind him without any kind of underdog aspect to his character. The humour is lacking too; the comedian's bread and butter is talking about how he comes up short with women, not boasting about his conquests. You've got the unintentional humour but I don't know if it can ably carry the story. I'd give it a C- so far.
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