[The Spotlight: A Story] *Chapter 1 Finished*

by **K0beStar** on Thu Jul 20, 2006 12:25 pm

Yeah I think you may be going somewhere with this story

. i gave it a 4 out of 5 :wink:

by **K0beStar** on Thu Jul 20, 2006 12:36 pm

But dont just take my opinion wait for others to comment on it.

by **Fresh8** on Thu Jul 20, 2006 2:25 pm

Good work champ, Im humbled by u saying i inspired u. (Y)

I hope you write more... and bout experience... i dont have that much writing experience mate.

Still, good luck with this one. (Y)

by **nets4life** on Thu Jul 20, 2006 2:28 pm

Should I keep writing?

Oh god no, please stop.. just jokes. Its great (Y)

by **Lakers08** on Thu Jul 20, 2006 3:25 pm

Not bad... i give you 4....

by **Fresh8** on Fri Jul 21, 2006 1:09 pm

Good work King, ur style is different to mine but u write well. (Y)

Better than me though haha, keep up the good work

by **Jing** on Fri Jul 21, 2006 2:00 pm

damn man, i finally read it... its certainly different from sits.. but i love it! (Y)

my suggestion would be to put some spacing between the lines. some parts are a bit hard to read becasue they are clumped togather.

by **Fresh8** on Fri Jul 21, 2006 2:33 pm

So man, have u read a lot of mine? Im just wondering seeing ur a newbie

[The Spotlight: A Story] Chapter 1 Finished