Thu Jul 20, 2006 12:25 pm
Yeah I think you may be going somewhere with this story 
. i gave it a 4 out of 5 
. i gave it a 4 out of 5
Thu Jul 20, 2006 12:36 pm
But dont just take my opinion wait for others to comment on it.
Thu Jul 20, 2006 2:25 pm
Good work champ, Im humbled by u saying i inspired u. 
I hope you write more... and bout experience... i dont have that much writing experience mate.
Still, good luck with this one.
I hope you write more... and bout experience... i dont have that much writing experience mate.
Still, good luck with this one.
Thu Jul 20, 2006 2:28 pm
Should I keep writing?
Oh god no, please stop.. just jokes. Its great
Thu Jul 20, 2006 3:25 pm
Not bad... i give you 4....
Fri Jul 21, 2006 1:09 pm
Good work King, ur style is different to mine but u write well. Better than me though haha, keep up the good work 
Better than me though haha, keep up the good work
Fri Jul 21, 2006 2:00 pm
damn man, i finally read it... its certainly different from sits.. but i love it!
my suggestion would be to put some spacing between the lines. some parts are a bit hard to read becasue they are clumped togather.
my suggestion would be to put some spacing between the lines. some parts are a bit hard to read becasue they are clumped togather.
Fri Jul 21, 2006 2:33 pm
So man, have u read a lot of mine? Im just wondering seeing ur a newbie