A Long Short Story [e-novel]CHAPTER 19 kent's nYt OuT

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A Long Short Story [e-novel]CHAPTER 19 kent's nYt OuT

Postby COOLmac© on Mon Jul 04, 2005 3:59 pm

CHAPTER one: a day less ordinary
It was a rainy afternoon late Monday around 5 PM. Walking to and fro was
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Kentaru around the busy giant mall. He was staring blankly at the display walls of some people pack bookstore and was anticipating a call at his cell phone. He was holding to it like it was a lifeline and almost every minute he gives a glance if someone gives a ring or a message. He just arrived at the big city from the province. He was called upon an emergency meeting to one of the partner companies his computer business is related into. Around 11:30 AM he was already at the airport, riding a taxi to a high class hotel eating a few snacks along the way and calling important persons too. He was at this certain big mall at a distinct location to meet with his long lost close friend name Chinky. They haven’t seen each other in 3 years and he wonders if the recent pics that girl has sent him could be the same face he could be meeting now. Chinky is the top secretary of the IONCOM computer Servers Company. The one that Kentaru will be seeing for the next whole week about some business proposals he is about to see through. It was 5:42 PM. 3 hrs and a mere 45 minutes since the time Kentaru has set foot at that mall. He already has his lunch. Scoop up a few drinks and a few memorabilia’s along the way. He caught a glance of a few cool flowers for sale in the area. But he never has the taste for flowers anyway. His ex-girlfriend of a year already dumps him the month before and since they ever started dating he never bought any flowers. So he thought that buying one for Chinky is out of the plan. But he likes the colors thou. Besides that girl is not just an hour late, 2 hours late but a whooping 3 hours and a quarter late. Also for some strange reasons he didn’t feel mad at all. Which bothers him, as he was a very impatient guy. Maybe it’s the anticipation of seeing somebody from his past that make him this patient all this time. Suddenly his phone rings. It was a message. From Chinky. She said she is sorry that she will be late and can he wait for another 20 minutes as she is just going to ride a taxi to the mall where Kentaru was in. Kentaru couldn’t help but rather agree on the deal. He said to avoid confusion for both parties he will be standing in front of the entrance gate near an ATM machine for easy recognition. Each moments pass is like eternity for Kentaru. He remembers the last time he met Chinky. It was diner. They were at their early 20’s then. Before he can finish his recollections the phone rang. A call from Chinky.

Chinky: sorry to keep you waiting sir. Are you in the spot where you said you are going to wait?

Kent: well yeah like for the past 6 hours or so [jokingly]

Chinky: are you mad? Coz if so, you wont look that great in your dirty white polo

Kent: my what? [Staring at his shirt, and noticing it was a dirty white colored polo] okay you are here somewhere right? [Looking around if she is indeed around near]

Chinky: nope just messing with you. It was a wild guess. Did you really wear that color? Coz I remember it was your favorite shade

Kent: I don’t recall telling you that. Could it be you have become some sort of psychic?

Chinky: nope I don’t think so. Could it be that you are still so easy to predict like you were ages ago?

Kent: me predictable? not! Could it be that you are playing games with me again like ages ago?

Chinky: nope now that’s twice you miss. Could it be I am right beside you, looking at your stupid grin and your blank stares of wonder?
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Kentaru looks around and there at the corner was a pretty sight. It was Chinky wearing a red T-shirt and black pants and a dark sandals. She is not wearing a uniform of some sort or any formal dress. She just looks, well rather casual. There were smiles, a few hugs and a lot of looking at each other’s eyes.


TO BE CONTINUED: stay glued :wink:
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Postby Jugs on Mon Jul 04, 2005 4:22 pm

wow nice story, is that your writing because it's really good
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Postby COOLmac© on Mon Jul 04, 2005 4:27 pm

yep, coz if your not that informed i am dying to get most of my scripts to our local TV stations here, but to no avail....not to worry coz if i save enough money in the near future i might produced/direct a tele novel for pilipinos...most of my stuff were taken in real life experiences..anyways this is my recent and most treasured work...i'll update it soon as long as i get the grammars and spellings correct and edited by a good linguist :lol:
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Postby AlwaysWhat,NeverWhy on Mon Jul 04, 2005 4:55 pm

i'll update it soon as long as i get the grammars and spellings correct and edited by a good ling


Nice writing, but it needs to be more fluid, not so telegram-style. *short sentence*.*short sentence*.*short sentence*. Not like this, anyway. Use some commas, some "and"s, you Know, spice it up a bit.

hey, is this the introduction to a porn novel? :lol:
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Postby COOLmac© on Mon Jul 04, 2005 5:06 pm

well yeah thanks for the tips DW.....but i just go with my style on this one.short sentences really fills up the title "A long short story" :lol:

btw sorry but i dont intend to bring out porn here for very young audiences :P just enjoy this writing and let's see if this is a romantic comedy, sexy romance or stuff like that.....we'll see what will happened...anyways i need names for 4 more guys and 6 more girls i would like to use in this...kindly post cool names which are catchy and easy to remember as your suggestions.
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Postby Jackal_ on Mon Jul 04, 2005 5:14 pm

ROFL

Mac.That.Was.The.Worst.Story.I've.Ever.Read.

ser.iou.s :|

lmao man..you crack me up..dude the story sounds like a sappy chinese porn. And the fact that you called the bitch "Chinky" hahahahhaa

I suggest you throw me in there, this way I can bang "Chinky" while you get some writing lessons! :lol:






j.k man i wanna see if chinky gets gangbanged later on in the story (Y)
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Postby COOLmac© on Mon Jul 04, 2005 5:16 pm

lots of horny 20 year olds in this forum i guess :lol:
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Postby Jackal_ on Mon Jul 04, 2005 5:17 pm

Just make sure you add in the Gangbang and I'm sure it'll win a Pulitzer.
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Postby J@3 on Mon Jul 04, 2005 9:57 pm

lmao man..you crack me up..dude the story sounds like a sappy chinese porn.


:lol: :lol: :lol: "I lick you long time!"
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Postby The X on Mon Jul 04, 2005 10:28 pm

I'm still waiting for part 2 of the Episode 2 - Attack of The Tools :(
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Postby AlwaysWhat,NeverWhy on Mon Jul 04, 2005 11:00 pm

The X wrote:I'm still waiting for part 2 of the Episode 2 - Attack of The Tools :(



Budget issues...

That's why he ventured into soft porn... funds.
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Postby kevC on Tue Jul 05, 2005 1:51 am

Jae wrote:
lmao man..you crack me up..dude the story sounds like a sappy chinese porn.


:lol: :lol: :lol: "I lick you long time!"


No, Jae, it's "I rick you rong rong time!"
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Postby Null17 on Tue Jul 05, 2005 1:54 am

I think there's really a porn flick series called "I love you long time" :lol:
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Postby J@3 on Tue Jul 05, 2005 2:24 am

kevC wrote:
Jae wrote:
lmao man..you crack me up..dude the story sounds like a sappy chinese porn.


:lol: :lol: :lol: "I lick you long time!"


No, Jae, it's "I rick you rong rong time!"


:lol: always good to get clarification from an expert.
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Postby COOLmac© on Tue Jul 05, 2005 10:58 am

The X wrote:I'm still waiting for part 2 of the Episode 2 - Attack of The Tools :(


it's there just read it.....but production has stopped because the actor that portrayed COOLmactine the Dark Lord Sidius has have death threats to his cat :lol:
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Postby kevC on Tue Jul 05, 2005 3:29 pm

Jae wrote:
kevC wrote:
Jae wrote:
lmao man..you crack me up..dude the story sounds like a sappy chinese porn.


:lol: :lol: :lol: "I lick you long time!"


No, Jae, it's "I rick you rong rong time!"


:lol: always good to get clarification from an expert.


Damn right I'm an expert, both in Asian accents and pr0n :hump: :cheeky:
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Postby Fresh8 on Tue Jul 05, 2005 5:17 pm

yo Coolmac, since thi is ur thread... is it true that Filipinos go play basketball and do this?

Play for 5 minutes, take a smoke, play another 5 minutes, take a smoke and do this for the whole afternoon?
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Postby COOLmac© on Tue Jul 05, 2005 6:31 pm

most of my known friends do.....but i dont smoke..... :wink:

there were others that plays basketball, smoke weed, drink gin/beer. have a laugh. shoot a few more hoops. gets mad at the other guy. starts a ramble. stabs each other....then after all the rucuss done, goes back to shooting more hoops :lol:
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Postby Jackal_ on Tue Jul 05, 2005 6:33 pm

COOLmac© wrote:most of my known friends do.....but i dont smoke..... :wink:

there were others that plays basketball, smoke weed, drink gin/beer. have a laugh. shoot a few more hoops. gets mad at the other guy. starts a ramble. stabs each other....then after all the rucuss done, goes back to shooting more hoops :lol:


No wonder no Phillipino's made the NBA. :lol:
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Postby Null17 on Tue Jul 05, 2005 6:33 pm

Sit wrote:yo Coolmac, since thi is ur thread... is it true that Filipinos go play basketball and do this?

Play for 5 minutes, take a smoke, play another 5 minutes, take a smoke and do this for the whole afternoon?


not anyone i know of. if you play, you play. if you smoke then smoke
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Postby J@3 on Tue Jul 05, 2005 9:32 pm

kevC wrote:
Jae wrote:
kevC wrote:
Jae wrote:
lmao man..you crack me up..dude the story sounds like a sappy chinese porn.


:lol: :lol: :lol: "I lick you long time!"


No, Jae, it's "I rick you rong rong time!"


:lol: always good to get clarification from an expert.


Damn right I'm an expert, both in Asian accents and pr0n :hump: :cheeky:


An Asian that likes porn... wonders never cease :lol:
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Postby Fresh8 on Wed Jul 06, 2005 9:07 am

Far out.. i've never met an asian who speaks openly about sex.. even the slightest bit...
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Postby cyanide on Wed Jul 06, 2005 11:26 am

Better put a disclaimer for the next story, because the inevitable's going to happen :cheeky:

A question though, why "Chinky"?
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Postby COOLmac© on Wed Jul 06, 2005 12:02 pm

in a few minutes i'll upload the next part:

why the hustle on the name chinky? we have that name all over the place here in our country :lol: :lol: :lol:

no need for disclaimer guys, just control your hormonal urges and sit back and relax and enjoy the rest of the story (Y)
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CHAPTER 2:the deal is seal

Postby COOLmac© on Wed Jul 06, 2005 12:16 pm

CHAPTER 2:the deal is seal

The rain somehow stops outside. Kentaru held Chinky’s hand as they struggled to move past the crowd of people waiting at the taxi terminal. Kentaru was chasing the moving taxis away, anticipating that some of them might be available to ride rather than being heavily occupied. After a few tries Kentaru looks a bit worried that the empty taxis were really hard to find this late in the afternoon, and to think it was raining. Kentaru turns back at Chinky; she just smiled back and tries to look around. Kentaru has to say something, he felt that Chinky’s been in the big city for almost 2 years now, she might have learned a few street smarts along the way.
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Kentaru: [sighing a bit] chin where do we ride off, its getting dark I do think we must be going.

Chinky: [grinning a bit] why didn’t you just bring your car here at the first place then we won’t be having troubles like we are having now

Kentaru: oh come on and drove 250kms away, I’d rather ride a train than wear my legs off driving

All of the sudden Chinky put two fingers across her lips and whistle loudly at a passing taxi, and then she waved when she had the driver’s attention. The taxi stopped in front of them.

Kentaru: wooh about time

Chinky: you are the gentleman aren’t you? [Being sarcastic]

Inside the taxi, they were both seated at the backseat. Kentaru started the chatter. He asked her if where he will be staying for the week.

Chinky: at my place of course

Kentaru: [looking rather shocked at the response] are you sure? And where do you happened to live young lady?

Chinky: some place better than the cheap hotels you have been into
Kentaru just agreed to go with the flow, he learned that these special meetings where guests have to be housed at cheap hotels, inns and stuff, he’s lucky a pretty friend offer her pad with him to share. He is a bit worried though that Chinky might be living with someone else already or that she have a family member in her apartment, now won’t that be just nice? He thought for a while. As he stared at the taxi mirror he can clearly get a view at the old man driving the cab giving him the wink. What’s that all about? He thought. After a 25-minute ride and a full-length chat with Chinky, they arrived at their destination. The place looks cool. 30 floored building and with restaurants and gardens and fountains to go along with.
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Inside the elevator Kentaru gathered up a few inches of guts and utters a few words while pressing hard on the roller handle of his bag.

Kentaru: hey chin, who’s staying with you here?

Chinky: with me? Well let’s see? My cousin and my brother.

Kentaru: no shit just as I thought

Chinky: you thought what?

Kentaru: never mind

Chinky: oh yeah [the elevator opens and she step outside] in case you’re wondering, they’re both back in the province for vacation. [The elevator door closes leaving Kentaru inside with bulging eyes]

A few minutes later Kentaru returns to the 8th floor and brings himself to Chinky’s pad while the girl stands in the doorway. She asked him to what does he think about the place and the interior. Kentaru has never seen anything so dull and simple all his life, reminds him of being in a hotel all over again. He smiled lowered his bag and sat on the sofa.

Kentaru: I think I’m gonna like it here. You really mean we are going to be alone here together for the week?

Chinky: well yeah [hitting Kentaru in the head] as if…. I know you’re pretty harmless you little jerk [laughs rather loudly]
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